*I have updated this story and the newer version can be found listed under Inner Thoughts on my website.
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| Arjun and Karan battle. Source: Wikimedia. |
Arjuna’s POV
Arjuna watched as his brother Karna stepped onto the battlefield, bow at the ready. “Look at his stupid face,” thought Arjuna.
He looked around at all of his soldiers and his brother’s soldiers to see them all watching. He knew in that moment. He knew this was going to be the last fight. The winner though, that he didn’t know. He wasn’t sure who was going to come out victorious in the end but he knew he was going to give his all. So slowly, he started making his way onto the battlefield.
“I have to win this fight. If Karna beats me, my soldiers are going to make fun of me. Bhima is going to crush me to death. Literally crush me to death,” thought Arjuna.
As he took his place on his chariot, he looked up to see Karna staring at him.
Karna’s POV
“Oh brother, you are so going down today,” thought Karna. “There is no way I’m losing to my little brother.”
Karna couldn’t help but cringe when he saw his brother. He looked like a fly and a fly Karna so badly want to smash.
He began shooting arrows at Arjuna, hoping one of them would pierce him in the heart. His arrows were hitting Arjuna spot on and he knew from the way Arjuna reacted that they were stinging like snakes.
Arjuna’s POV
“Bloody hell! These arrows are stinging so badly. Karna is getting it now.” He set off his own set of arrows and they it looked like a rain shower of arrows had descended on Karna.
Arjuna felt his bow snap and knew he was in trouble. “Stop, Karna! You can’t attack me like this. You know that’s against the rules.” But from the look on Karna’s face, he knew his brother didn’t care.
Karna’s POV
“HAHA you little brat. That’s what you get,” thought Karna. He continued to shoot arrows at Arjuna until he knew he was gravely injured.
However, he saw Arjuna get up and restring his bow, and his brother did not look too happy. But Karna wasn’t scared. As he was about to send another set of arrows on Arjuna, he felt his chariot sink into the ground.
“Oh no. No no no!” cried Karna. “Stop, Arjuna! You can’t attack me right now.”
Arjuna’s POV
“Oh heck no. What a hypocrite!” thought Arjuna. Before he could reply, his friend Krishna started talking.
“Karna, what you said is right, but you’re being a hypocrite you know? Didn’t you shoot arrows at Arjuna even though he was injured? Didn’t you and your soldiers surround Abhimanyu and kill him brutally?” asked Krishna.
As he heard his son’s name, Arjuna felt the rage he had subdued rise again and he snatched his bow. He looked at Karna with all the rage he had and let the crescent-bladed arrow go.”
He saw his brother’s head fall off his shoulders, and in that moment all he could think of was his son.
“That was for my son. Rest in peace, Karna. You won’t be missed.”
Hey Shivani! Your story was very interesting and almost sad due to the deadly sibling rivalry. I did really like how you used the point of views for characters and transitioned from on to the other. By doing this you really helped me to get into their head while being able to understand what was happening and at what moment. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHello Shivani! I just wanted to say that I loved your story! It flowed very well! You had my attention from the beginning to the very end! I can see you put a lot of hard work and imagination into your writing. I hope you have a great semester! Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more of your stories.
ReplyDeleteHey Shivani!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your story! I liked how you wrote it in the point of view of both brothers. I think that made the story even more interesting to read. It's so sad that one brother was killed by the other brother. You did a great job including details because I was able to imagine the battle go down. Keep up the good work!
Hey Shivani,
ReplyDeleteI really like the formatting of your story! It's very easy to read and keep myself attentive. I ran into your story on your website! It seems like you kept most of the content the same! The brotherly fight will never get old.