The Secret Superhero
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“Help! Please, someone help me!” screamed the boy from the top of the tree. Sri was holding on tightly to the biggest branch he could find. He knew the branch could break any moment now, and he was afraid of falling to ground and breaking a limb. His friend had dared him to climb the tallest tree to prove he wasn’t scared of heights. Sri had to prove to them he wasn’t scared but he didn’t want to look like a loser either so he took the challenge. Now here he was, about to fall from 50 feet up.
From a few feet away, Krish heard the call for help. He was on his daily jog through the park. He ran faster towards the voice. He soon found the source of the voice. Hidden in between many trees, he saw something in one of them. As he looked closer, he could see that it was a little boy hanging from a tree branch.
He rushed to the boy. “Let go, I’ll catch you,” he called to the boy. The boy looked down and shook his head. “No, I’m scared!” Sri screamed.
“I can catch you, I promise,” Krish told the. But Sri adamantly refused.
Krish looked around to make sure no one was watching and concentrated on the boy. Before him he saw the boy floating down to the ground. In a matter of a few seconds, the boy stood right in front of him.
“How did you do that!” exclaimed Sri at Krish. “Are you a magician?”
Krish laughed at that. “No, I’m not. But I do have this secret superpower. I can get things to move with my mind. It’s called telekinesis. But you can’t tell anyone about what just happened, okay? No one can know,” said Krish.
“Why not? You’re a superhero! Everyone should know,” said Sri. He looked so confused as to why this man wouldn’t want to tell everyone about his powers.
“Because… people won’t understand. People think I’m weird anyway. But just promise me you won’t tell anyone,” Krish looked at the boy with pleading eyes.
“Okay. I promise I won’t,” Sri told Krish. Krish breathed a sigh of relief and looked at the boy and said, “thank you, I appreciate that.”
"Um, can you show me what else you can move with your mind?" Sri asked Krish. "Well, I guess I'll show you just once and that's it."
"Okay!" smiled an excited Sri. He watched as Krish looked attentively at a big log. He saw the log start to float. Krish looked at the boy through the corner of his eye and smiled as he saw the boy's eyes get bigger. Krish used his power to throw the log almost 25 feet away.
“Oh okay. By the way, what’s your name mister?” asked Sri. Krish smiled at the boy. “I’m Krish, what’s your name?”
“Sridhama, but you can call me Sri. Everyone calls me that.”
“Well, it’s nice to meet you Sri. Now try not getting stuck in a tree again. Who knows, I won’t be around to save you next time,” laughed Krish.
“Oh, don’t worry. I won’t ever make that mistake again. But at least now that I know you’re a superhero, you’ll come help me if I ever need help again right?” asked Sri.
Krish laughed again. “Sure kid. But remember, you can’t tell anyone else.”
“I know I know. Thanks for saving me, Krish!” And with that, Sri ran back to his friends thinking about his new superhero friend Krish.
Hi Shivani! Your week 10 story was amazing! I also love how you added your image to something cozy and unique rather than something overwhelming. I definitely love how you created a script for your story! It adds potential and a meaning about the author which is great to learn from about! Overall, you did an amazing job, Shivani. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteHi Shivani! Your story was great! This is my first time on your blog site and I love it. I like the color scheme you went with. It is so different from most of the others I have seen. I like how this essentially all dialog. I feel like that can be a difficult way to write, but you seem to have done it effortlessly. Overall it was great and best of luck on the rest of the semester.
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ReplyDeleteThis was a great story! I really enjoyed the dialogue that you used, it really added to each character. You followed the plot of the original story greatly, and definitely gave krish the presence of almost being a superhero. This was a great story and I really look forward to reading the rest of your Stories!
Hi Shivani!
ReplyDeleteGreat story! I thought you did a great job modernizing the story! I really liked that you gave him a modern superpower. Personally, I think telekinesis is the coolest superpower out there. I also had a mental image of Krish as Mr. Incredible and one of his kid fans. Anyways, great job with this story and I look forward to reading more!
Hey Shivani!
ReplyDeleteI loved reading your story! I liked the way you wrote it using dialogues. It made it very easy and interesting to read. I think you also did a great job on including details in your story. It was cool how you gave Krishna the superpower of telekinesis. Overall, I think you did a great job on the story!
Hi Shivani!
ReplyDeleteYour story had a great super hero feeling to it! You did really well at portraying the hero image in Krish and how he didn't want anyone to know about his secret power. I really liked the connection that Sri made with Krish! I imagined that they became friends and Krish would be back to help him some time later! Keep up the good work!
Hi Shivani! This was such a fun, wholesome story! You did a great job of setting up the dilemma at the beginning and characterizing Sri's childhood earnestness when faced with finding a true superhero. I remember you saying you liked Marvel movies in your intro (me too!), and that enthusiasm for the positive part of superheroism was evident throughout. Thanks for sharing!
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